Thursday, 10 March 2011

Left Behind

Mothers smiling at their babies
I cannot smile at mine
Parents cuddling their children
I cannot cuddle mine
Photos with their eyes so bright
His eyes are shut in mine
In this journey of parenthood
I have been left behind

*This is my first ever attempt at writing poetry. I got the idea from a writing prompt over at Mama's Losin' It! The prompt was to write a poem about that time you were left behind. 

It's nice to stretch once in while, but I'm not so sure poetry is my strength.
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24 comments:

  1. Tess10 March 2011 at 07:59

    It is beautiful
    Well done for giving it ago

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  2. Becky10 March 2011 at 08:13

    I like it! Sadly it is the truth

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  3. Hope's Mama10 March 2011 at 08:37

    Beautiful. You should submit this to Angie from still life 365.
    xo

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  4. Missy10 March 2011 at 09:36

    Precious and moving! Thank you for sharing!

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  5. Ashley@LearningLifeAsLucy10 March 2011 at 13:34

    This is so sad and truly makes my heart ache for you. I was blessed with one child and know only the pain of having trouble conceiving. your pain is inconceivable to me. I wish I could hug you, and every other person who has had to experience this <3 You're strength is admirable, so very admirable.

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  6. Anonymous10 March 2011 at 13:49

    Poignantly beautiful! Somethings just need to be said that are within us, they need to come out and be aired.

    Yesterday, in the grocery store (I'm posting about this tomorrow) - a little boy ran around, screaming, climbing on my cart and suddenly, he was walking with me. He asked me - really, he asked me (he was about 4) "Do you think I'm going to hell?"

    And my heart cried - because this little boy needed a mom like you, who would reach out, hug the breath out of him, set healthy boundaries for him, and tell him, "You can go to heaven if you want to."

    He asked if he could go home with me. Then his mother started screaming at him and he took off.

    Yes - he definitely needed someone like you:)

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  7. TanaLee Davis10 March 2011 at 16:03

    you did a nice job.
    ~felicia

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  8. Kim Lehnhoff10 March 2011 at 16:13

    You did a great job. I am sorry for your loss. I hope you find your new normal soon.

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  9. Wantapeanut10 March 2011 at 17:04

    That last line is just beautiful and heartbreaking.

    My son has been left behind in so many ways because of autism, but you have reminded me again how precious he is to me no matter what.

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  10. Patty10 March 2011 at 18:25

    You may have a hidden talent! the words exactly describe what we feel as BLMs.

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  11. Jenn10 March 2011 at 18:34

    I really like it. Thanks for sharing it with all of us!

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  12. Branson10 March 2011 at 19:40

    I don't know... this was pretty powerful! You may have more of a knack for poetry than you think...

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  13. Becky Baker10 March 2011 at 20:05

    Its PERFECT!!
    I can totally understand and agree with your poetry! You should continue with your venture ;-)

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  14. Natasha10 March 2011 at 21:17

    This is very good! I think you should keep writing!

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  15. Anonymous11 March 2011 at 00:43

    I think you did a great job! Poetry is difficult. My theory is always - if it rhymes, it's good. lol! Visiting from Mama Kat's

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  16. Jenna11 March 2011 at 01:06

    a unique and lovely response to the prompt. I thought it was well done and very emotionally evocative, thank you for sharing it with us! this is my first stop by your blog, from the mamakat linkup.

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  17. The Reason You Come11 March 2011 at 05:10

    This is beautiful, honest, raw, and touching! I'm sorry for your loss.

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  18. My New Normal11 March 2011 at 08:45

    Thanks everyone. My high school english teacher gave me a D for my last attempt at poetry. Your comments are much nicer than hers were.

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  19. mumsarcade11 March 2011 at 12:41

    So sorry for your loss and did make me remember to love my children more proactively every day.
    Poetry that moves and makes a difference is good poetry so you are a good poet and a fab woman

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  20. McKenna11 March 2011 at 12:41

    So beautifully heartbreaking. Amazing job.

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  21. Colie's Kitchen12 March 2011 at 03:31

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  22. ..al12 March 2011 at 06:36

    Hey, you did an awesome job. And your sentiment pinched me to boot. I know what you are talking of and from where it comes.

    I am sorry.

    But please, you are a good poetess.

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  23. Ixy13 March 2011 at 05:32

    Your poem is beautiful and I subscribe to the "if you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all" rule. It hurt my heart and made me want to cry, but it's beautiful. I'm so sorry to hear of your loss.

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  24. little vitu's mom17 March 2011 at 07:32

    I'm new to your blog and relatively new to the world of baby loss mamas. I came here through the blog of another baby loss mama.

    What i want to tell you is that your poem is both poignant and beautiful. And its so true.I liked the last two lines best. They suit me so well too. Thanks for posting.

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